It’s my first story so gettinng used to the writing portion. xx video Your doing fine, don’t give up. Keep going just slow down.«1» SLO DOWN, take it easy and start over. Spell check please, and greater story formulation wouldn’t hurt.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 06:38:58Take time to proof your stories. Your doing fine, don’t give up. (countrycadillac)blonde_kidReport 2013-05-21 11:51:51Thanks for the feedback. Just a little harder to do proof reads when you’re on a kindle touch.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 11:46:07It really needs a rewrite. Pronouns should start with a capital(Grace). Just a little harder to do proof reads when you’re on a kindle touch.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 11:46:07It really needs a rewrite. It’s my first story so gettinng used to the writing portion. SLO DOWN, take it easy and start over. Your doing fine, don’t give up.
