It stands good on its own but I’d like to see you edit it and add more. xx video this is a first draft only and need major work before it is posted. 12 comments«123»Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-18 20:18:34THE BEST THING YOU CAN DO IS DELETE IT AND START OVER FROM THE BEGINNING. DO THEY KEEP FUCKING OR WAS IT A ONE TIME THING? who are they and why should we care about them or want them together? DO THEY KEEP FUCKING OR WAS IT A ONE TIME THING? WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? personality and character traits, how they interact in normal situations, etc. Thanks for taking the time to write it.anonymous readerReport 2013-04-18 15:15:40a very good start but keep this story going.«123»
