The “D” was pure hoke. Right now you are trying to be clever. Asian xxx a simple story line whould have worked much better. WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» a simple story line whould have worked much better. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. Right now you are trying to be clever. I write and sell a few stories. i was definatly captured all the way to the end. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. The “D” was pure hoke. I also agree with wordytom… If yours was crap I would have moved on and not bothered. good effert 9/10wordytomReport 2008-10-26 17:15:47Too gimicky.
