Don’t give up.«1» You’re trying to develop the characters, build suspense and garner enough interest for a sequel but you fail. Don’t give up.«1» You’re trying to develop the characters, build suspense and garner enough interest for a sequel but you fail. XXX Don’t give up.«1» 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-10-18 22:56:44I’m giggling at jiggling asses!YianoReport 2012-03-31 20:02:19I didn’t know asses could giggle… Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors. Re-write it, keeping the narrative arc in mind, and then proof read it (out loud) to edit out the errors.
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Alex Adams / Brianna Beach
